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check out my new story book. Shadow Valentine.

ok, here's my character Name: Phelix Stark Age:16 Personality: He is friendly to most people but he does not always like them. He is not naturally violent until somebody else ...

just so you know. It's not an asylum. It's just a boarding school for troubled teens.

Phelix: I awoke when i was being dragged on the ground. I felt the muzzle of a gun press against my head as the officer saw that i was awake. ...

Hey.This is the plot. Hope you think it's cool "The whole school was distributed the vaccine. It was supposed to leave them immune from the Dastel Influenza. But it did ...

save me s spot. Also, will we at be together or what. Will thier be one sole goal. Or just random assassinations. Will we be getting trained or already masters?

Phelix: *Time to get kidnapped* I felt a bullet rip through my shoulder. My mouth opened and i roared at the ceiling. Dark blood slowly drizzled out. I turned slowly ...

question. are they shooting at us now? And.... can some us get captured. I vote Phelix gets held hostage

crap, i didn't read your post nick. ummmmm.... let's just pretend my post happened right before yours did. I didn't realize that your character was with mine... How about you ...

Phelix "Oh crap," i muttered to scarlet and lowered my hand. "Crap crap crap." I crouched as more humans streamed into the auditorium with guns raised. I leaped out of ...

Phelix: "Are you ok," i asked. "You look, in pain..." Scarlet's brow furrowed. "Johnathon, he smells soo good," she grimaced. I looked around the auditorium, and finally saw Johnathon walking ...

Phelix: 1 week later I sat in the small auditorium of our school. It was loud and wild, and all different animals/ monsters flew or jumped around. I felt uneasy. ...

Woah, ouch, that hurt...... Phelix "Well, i don't need to eat, or sleep, so..." i began. Johnathon nodded. "Let's get out of here," he said. "Do either of you play ...

i don't know what to do now.... Somethign exciting needs to happen

What i would like to know: Did this make you feel any emotion? Where the characters believable? Is this a good writing level to be at for a 14 year ...